This message is intended to the General Dynamic’s repair and return organization. Our primary focus is to manage, repair and deliver customer product at the lowest rate, fastest turn around and with a minimal defect percentage. Our company is threatened by missing delivery dates, delivering non-conforming product and by other corporations that can perform the same work at a lower rate. Our vision is to capitalize on all the repairs available in the special strategic program (SSP) of the US military. Our main challenge is to increase the capability to manage an increasing number of products as rapidly as possible. Under the cognizant of lead manufacturing managers, vice presidents and president, the senior engineers and supervisors will be in charge to implement and execute all the plans required in order to adapt as the company increase the ability to support all the branches of SSP. All personnel in the repair and return facility are vital for the company’s success. As a military contractor, we should all take pride in what we do, since our main goal is to support those who protect this country.
Nice finish, aligning individuals and their effort with the goals of the organization. The impact of cheaper labor and the comoditization of primary products means all have to work smarter to keep cost down and quality high.
ReplyDeleteAnexi, I like how you marched through the elements of this memo with a clear connection between the company's big picture mission to the particular implications for the immediate audience.
ReplyDeleteI would have broken it into paragraphs to separate the major elements.
Also pay close attention to your use of English grammar. Make sure verbs agree with subjects. Tight grammar makes for easier understanding with less distraction.
I liked how you started with your primary focus, and then specified the threats and challenges. I've always found most mission statements vague and blurred with some redundant information. I also liked how you concluded the statement with a great motivation.
ReplyDeleteAnexi, I thought your organizational memo had great structure and effectively called out with you wanted to get across to your employees. I like how you remind employees about their role when you reiterated the company's primary focus in the second sentence.
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